tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post2452515250096479953..comments2023-03-28T07:32:16.266-07:00Comments on Moineau en France: dreams of a disabled womanLaura Tattoohttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05503853041054419287noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-9809384881612748522008-11-20T14:01:00.000-08:002008-11-20T14:01:00.000-08:00I decided to translate...this poem makes me sadI s...I decided to translate...<BR/>this poem makes me sad<BR/>I sense the reality and fatality<BR/>of all<BR/>the sins/fish leave us the smell of death<BR/>nevertheless we continue<BR/>waiting for GodotJan Hershhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14822908049171411376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-25865557863970569382008-11-20T10:35:00.000-08:002008-11-20T10:35:00.000-08:00One of the best "song of myself" poems I've read i...One of the best "song of myself" poems I've read in a very long time, Laura, especially with your use of the key repeating stanzas that reinforce a framing vision of God, of order, so you can explode it with experience, so you can also kill it with your shared boredom with a cat, so you can reify the life that is worth living. There is an extraordinary tautness in this language that focuses and refocuses on the immediate, on the props of living, and what we consider existence as essence, as being part of the world. I was riveted by the different transitions in the poem, as well as the use of repeated phrases, to get across the sense of the self in a sea of rising and attenuated meaning. Beautiful poem about a poet trying to validate the ineffable in life in its daily particulars, but also trying to overcome the catastrophic situation, the paralyzing circumstances.....John Walterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08670993524464238948noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-14484052199003233882008-11-17T18:00:00.000-08:002008-11-17T18:00:00.000-08:00I second Ron: Your vulnerability and honesty peak ...I second Ron: Your vulnerability and honesty peak volumes; The language glistens.Barbary Chaapelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03049229761019622952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-85414162856679951562008-11-17T03:23:00.000-08:002008-11-17T03:23:00.000-08:00thank you, everyone, for your thoughtful comments....thank you, everyone, for your thoughtful comments. stirling, i love how i discovered your resurrected blog. thanks for your loving support. ron, i wouldn't knock your critical skills; you always grab the very heart of everything you read. jan, i appreciate your verse-critiques so much; like morality tales, i learn something new every time you write one. xoxoxoxLaura Tattoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05503853041054419287noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-78977086833341630102008-11-16T20:57:00.000-08:002008-11-16T20:57:00.000-08:00cet poem me fait tristeje me sens la realitefatali...cet poem me fait triste<BR/>je me sens la realite<BR/>fatalite de tous<BR/>les peches nous laissent<BR/>l'odeur de la mort<BR/>neamoins nous continuons<BR/>en attendent GodotJan Hershhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14822908049171411376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-16390195941219366742008-11-16T19:34:00.000-08:002008-11-16T19:34:00.000-08:00I've only read and appreciated poetry for about a ...I've only read and appreciated poetry for about a year. I lack both the interpretive and critiquing skills to realistically convey how a poem sometimes moves me. I enjoy John W.'s comments on my poetic attempts more than my poetry.<BR/><BR/>In any event, I know what I like whether I can verbalize it or not and I like this one a lot. It was like watching you from an overhead light as you kept tuning out the external and focusing on the internal. <BR/><BR/>Smoking, thinking and writing are broken only by anticipation or distraction while waiting for another's arrival.<BR/><BR/>There is very little we can keep. Bravo Laura, I love your vulnerability and honesty.Ron B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/04938850070376486656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1075224319054587651.post-85729266833011618262008-11-16T16:40:00.000-08:002008-11-16T16:40:00.000-08:00This is great, moineau. I especially love these l...This is great, moineau. I especially love these lines:<BR/>"there is not enough<BR/>silence for an<BR/>accurate poem"<BR/><BR/>Wow - but good try, oui?Stirling Davenporthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07974286252135492445noreply@blogger.com