ace in the hole
take a bunch of daffodils
and lay them on the stone
there's a lot going on
whether you see it or not
black sky
deepest night ever seen
venus like a car beam
in your eyes
no moon
scratch that itch
and put it down to dryness
nothing helps
not benedryl nor smack
nothing but a bandage
create a horror show
for the ones coming home
we've wasted years for this
the decrepit solitude
the scars of blitzkrieg
fuck i can't think
it's like another brick
red, dense, durable
fumigate the afterthought
down with cfs
You put things so well that one doesn't know where to start or end. Laying the lovely, fragile flowers on "stone". I love the contrast. It IS "stone" (how perfect), the noncompassion regarding "CFS" (not accidental) and the resulting hardness to one's own suffering. I also have a sense that there's a "lot going on" that can't be seen..."black sky" for the patient community but there's light in their eyes. I like your metaphor of the itch that nothing helps combined with the idea of a common explanation for a complex situation - "put it down to dryness." Yeah, sure doc. "A bandage" - cover over those symptoms [and no more whining]. Are we "coming home" from the "CFS" war, a war with doctors, federal agencies, the disinformed public to be treated to more official slanderous psychobabble - "a horror show"? "Fumigate" - as in remove the demeaning terminology and phony case definitions that form a social construct called "CFS"? That's how I take it. Very powerful for me. Thanks, Laura.
RépondreSupprimerloved your analysis!!! yeah, there's a lot going on in that blank verse. :>>))) xoxoxooxoxox
RépondreSupprimer"fumigate the afterthought"
RépondreSupprimer...on second thoughts, keep that line :)